Cinders Path
She wandered to the waters edge
As tears fell down her sullen cheeks
And as a frog would gently croak
A kiss was far from in her reach
–
As Cinders swept a dirty floor
Of trampled mud from sisters who
Would want for this & shout for that
Her dreams were washed in soiled gloom
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And birds would sing on window sills
As mice would strive to clean all ills
But apples bite would taste so sour
As spindles jab destroyed her hour
–
And so she slept away from pain
Within her fragile, glass domain
Whilst others cursed at wasted youth
That lay so still in tranquil peace
–
As knights would ride & pass on by
In search of love to fight their deeds
Yet place a kiss upon her lips
Was all it took to waken thee
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But Cinders part had long been played
As caution rode on thickened paths
And as the weeds encircled time
Alone she stayed bereft of love…………….
Pete Marshall 
May 25, 2010 at 12:14 pm
This poem is so beautifully said and done. Enjoyed reading it as every line flowed from beginning to end.
May 25, 2010 at 1:54 pm
hi & thanks viola, i must admit i liked writing that one myself as i let my mind visit many a fairy tale…
May 25, 2010 at 12:47 pm
Clever Poem with vivid image. You put the message and intent of the Poem clearly Man. This is tight. Cheers!
May 25, 2010 at 1:55 pm
Hi Emmanuel and many thanks for your praise. I’m glad you thought it tight, the last two lines look me over two hours to get right!!!! Dedication eh!!! regards Pete
May 25, 2010 at 2:03 pm
Once again you talent for writing has shone through
May 25, 2010 at 2:11 pm
thanks for that, been down in the trough of life bit starting to rise again fighting
May 25, 2010 at 4:02 pm
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May 25, 2010 at 7:31 pm
the last two lines were amazing. it ended beautifully.
May 25, 2010 at 7:59 pm
thanks for that, believe you me they were the toughest!!!!!
May 25, 2010 at 7:38 pm
and so the fairy tale ending is no more for poor Cinder
nice my friend
May 25, 2010 at 11:18 pm
please visit Brian to wish his 14th marriage annivesary.
Thanks a lot!
May 25, 2010 at 11:19 pm
betifully done!
pete, you are gifted!
May 26, 2010 at 6:15 am
thanks jingle, i am glad it was liked
May 26, 2010 at 5:40 pm
This is simply gorgeous. you gave a new look to snowwhite’s story.
May 27, 2010 at 10:16 am
thanks for that, the end was very much Baby Jane to me!!!!
May 26, 2010 at 6:10 pm
This is a wondeful take on the Cinderella story. You have a great talent.
Christine
May 27, 2010 at 10:14 am
i am glad you got to read this one early, cheers Christine
May 26, 2010 at 7:13 pm
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May 26, 2010 at 9:18 pm
Nicely written poem, love it 🙂
May 27, 2010 at 10:03 am
thanks for visiting & commenting..cheers Pete
May 26, 2010 at 10:33 pm
oh dude this is sad…bereft of love, i would not want to be…
May 27, 2010 at 10:03 am
cheers Brian, i doubt you would after having your own celebrations..cheers Pete
May 26, 2010 at 11:06 pm
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May 27, 2010 at 10:03 am
thanks Dustus, from you thats praise indeed
May 27, 2010 at 2:13 am
i’ve always liked fairytales, even up to now. and it’s very rare that i find poetry based on them that i like.
I like this one 😀
-kyogakura
May 27, 2010 at 9:56 am
Hi Kyoichi, and thanks for that, getting the right stories was important to make this work..cheers Pete
May 27, 2010 at 3:18 am
Well done- I loved the flow and the images that flew for me while reading it..
May 27, 2010 at 9:54 am
thanks, it was the imagery i was trying to capture here fore the reader so…job well done
May 27, 2010 at 11:28 am
Pete,
Very nice weaving of fairy tales elements:
And birds would sing on window sills
As mice would strive to clean all ills
But apples bite would taste so sour
As spindles jab destroyed her hour
Thanks for your kind comments on my site.
Rhyme on!
Tim Keeton
(Undead)Poet / Wizard / Teller-of-tales
May 27, 2010 at 1:12 pm
thanks tim, did enjoy doing this one
May 27, 2010 at 12:09 pm
nailed with great talent .well done Pete.
May 27, 2010 at 1:12 pm
thanks wordwand, always a pleasure to see you pop by
May 27, 2010 at 12:29 pm
When I read this a thousand pictures crossed my mind. Pure artistry!
May 27, 2010 at 1:13 pm
thank you for reading it & enjoying it so much, cheers Pete
May 27, 2010 at 12:39 pm
What a great post! Hope you’re ok, this had so much resonance I could really relate 🙂 Sorry I haven’t been here for a while, home is an issue LOL. Welsh hugs Pete!
May 27, 2010 at 1:14 pm
bigger welsh hugs than i can handle i hope LOL.. dont worry just pop over whenever the mood takes, and hope it all sorts itself out, cheers Pete
May 27, 2010 at 5:23 pm
You took this fairytale to new levels…of poem of great sadness. Kudos to you on an excellent poem filled with image and emotion.
May 28, 2010 at 9:16 am
hi suzi, that’s a lovely comment, thank you.
May 27, 2010 at 5:30 pm
aawww…seems like a take on Cinderella/sleeping beauty and other princesses rolled into one…
if so it has come out sooo well.. im spellbound 😀
Im here from Jingle’s Rally
you can view my poem at
May 28, 2010 at 9:19 am
it just worked & so had to do it, thanks for your comments Pete
May 27, 2010 at 5:49 pm
hey very nice work.
May 28, 2010 at 9:19 am
thanks for viewing it, cheers Pete
May 27, 2010 at 8:12 pm
pete you are a prolific writer, the work that went into this post amazes me, superb 🙂
May 28, 2010 at 9:20 am
Now I like that comment, thanks mate
May 27, 2010 at 10:08 pm
I love the fairytale re-telling, with the feel of an early bard. Nicely written!
http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/
May 28, 2010 at 9:22 am
thanks for your comments, early bard…like that!!
May 28, 2010 at 1:40 am
Very clever the way you tied the fairy tales together. Loved the imagery, loved the flow, loved the bit of sadness felt. Great writing!
May 28, 2010 at 9:23 am
thanks Laura, i appreciate that, i think i said in an earlier comment getting the right stories was paramount for this to work, cheers Pete
May 28, 2010 at 2:04 am
Love the imagery this invokes in me –very descriptive use of words in a very beautiful way.
Joanny
came by jingle today
May 28, 2010 at 9:23 am
thanks joanny, i think imagery seems to be my strong point, which flows heavily in most of my work
May 28, 2010 at 3:37 am
Your 2 hours of work for two last lines was worth it. I too loved the ending. A bittersweet life and weeds encircling time. Wow. Beautiful take on fairy tale love. Popped by from Ji’s rally
May 28, 2010 at 9:25 am
thanks, seems silly doesn’t it, two hours to write two lines but i must have binned a 1000 words!!!!!LOL but that’s the point you dont give it up till it feel right!!!
May 28, 2010 at 4:08 pm
I liked the fairy tale motif.
May 28, 2010 at 9:59 pm
thanks for viewing, cheers Pete
May 28, 2010 at 6:13 pm
such a deep title……profound thinking……..what a rhym…..impressed me alot….!!!
May 28, 2010 at 10:01 pm
thank you, its always pleasing to know when my work has left an affect!!
May 28, 2010 at 11:04 pm
life is no fairy tale, indeed.
May 29, 2010 at 12:47 pm
too damn right!!!!!!
May 30, 2010 at 6:00 am
wow…….great……..lovely concept………..!!!!
May 30, 2010 at 7:11 am
thanks for your comments, cheers Pete
May 31, 2010 at 1:23 am
Another great poem. It is so rich with feeling and imagery–very moving!!
May 31, 2010 at 7:22 am
thanks again, i do like this one myself