*abandoned*

abandoned

there are
some days when
my friendly sky is hidden
there are nights when
the stars get dark
obscured
with the heavy
clouds of strange doubts
promising a storm a tempest
hard to be stopped
the one sending
the cold drops
of rain
threating
to wash away
all the tiny grains
of one dream I had
when questions
with no answer
pile up
as
sharp towers
ripping up my hope
into shreds into debris
taking the calmness away
leaving me unsafe vulnerable
alone abandoned
like a broken
boat
out there
at the merciless
stormy ocean of life

***
© Eclipse 2008 – 2011

A to Z Challenge

~ by Eclipse on April 1, 2011.

Posted in Poetry
Tags: A to Z Challenge, Dark

17 Responses to “abandoned”

And these days seem to come to me more often… beautiful words Eclipse.

Sam said this on April 6, 2011 at 7:06 am | Reply
As you know, we’ve been friends since the old MSN Live Spaces days. I don;t usually get a chance to come out and read you every day. However, when I do make it, I am always reminded why I come here. I am glad that so many other folks appreciate your talent as much as I do.

douginator said this on April 3, 2011 at 12:09 am | Reply
- Many thanks Doug, I really appreciate your visits and the encouraging comments 🙂
  
  eclipseofthemoon said this on April 4, 2011 at 9:04 am | Reply
Very nice!! The poem was great and can’t wait to see what else you bring to the table for the month of April!

Jason said this on April 2, 2011 at 5:11 am | Reply
- Thank you very much for reading and your kind comment Jason 🙂
  
  eclipseofthemoon said this on April 4, 2011 at 8:56 am | Reply
Being abandoned is as worse as you depict !
Sad words perfeclty done ..

ladynimue said this on April 1, 2011 at 10:02 pm | Reply
I like how you’re using the letters to make poems. Lovely.

mary aalgaard said this on April 1, 2011 at 9:04 pm | Reply
- Thank you mary 🙂
  
  eclipseofthemoon said this on April 4, 2011 at 8:54 am | Reply
I’m never really sure what to say in reaction to poetry. This is beautiful and sad and I wish I didn’t relate to it so well.

Karen Peterson said this on April 1, 2011 at 7:34 pm | Reply
- …and you’ve said it so nice…
  Thank you very much Karen
  
  eclipseofthemoon said this on April 4, 2011 at 8:48 am | Reply
Wonderful, gut wrenching poem….Nice job!

Sharon Mayhew said this on April 1, 2011 at 6:23 pm | Reply
- Thank you Sharon
  
  eclipseofthemoon said this on April 4, 2011 at 8:47 am | Reply
~POETRY MONTH CLAMBAKE: 2011~

hope you make it!

Luna

lunawitch15 said this on April 1, 2011 at 3:36 pm | Reply
Nice to meet you- I enjoyed this poem- great start to the A-z challenge. I’m a poet/writer.
Have a terrific day!

Summer Ross said this on April 1, 2011 at 2:58 pm | Reply
- Thank you Summer Ross, nice meeting you, I’ll stop by soon
  
  eclipseofthemoon said this on April 4, 2011 at 8:40 am | Reply
Lovely poem, lovely blog…no little mug shots to stick my picture in. Nice to meet you.
Nancy
N. R. Williams, The Treasures of Carmelidrium.

N. R. Williams said this on April 1, 2011 at 2:02 pm | Reply
- Thanks so much Nancy, nice to meet you too
  
  eclipseofthemoon said this on April 4, 2011 at 8:00 am | Reply